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[cherry]

I've AIM'd at least seven different people today, and not received a single answer. Really, there can't be a conspiracy that far reaching, can there?

I mean, I haven't seen a single trench coat...



(But in other news: 3550 words just this afternoon. That's pretty good for me. Part 6 of The Karma Downs is finished, but now I really need to wait on beta on 4 and 5, because I shouldn't move beyond six until I have people check my OCs. Stupid OCs.)


::Wanders off to randomly talk to people to see if she can get an answer or two::

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Re: I'm here :).

[cherryice.livejournal.com]

::Grins:: One person, two people, three people, four... After a while, you just start to get a bit edgy.

But I have recieved the beta. Merci. It's very good. (Again.) The one thing that's tripping me off is the name insertion. Putting it in where you suggested does bring it all in. It's something I hadn't thought of, because it came in earlier in the original ending. Just dropping it in seems a little abrupt for how I have the story set up, but it probably should come in to play earlier, at least so that the rest of the thing can stand on its own merit, and have the focus shifted some place other than making the reader just "Huh?"